In another deadly place
Locked within a maze
I could only care more not less
Than I should yet each day
I reach beyond whats me
Fulfilling every dream
I ever had one day
Perfection is not seen
Lest the eyes have been
In a darker phase
Comfort you’ll never feel
Utopia is not real
My promise comes today
I can do my best I say
I can stretch the rules & play
As if it were a game
*
Its a better me for you
Consummation due
From a different view
All you see is new
It can’t be true?
Till my life is through
Live & die for you
I thought I knew
Now its up to you
*
You close the door
Arms open wide
Opposing every might
What can I say?
We serve what we can’t see
Pleading not guilty
To a bloody crime
The stain won’t be erased
Soaking wet make haste
To leave the storm
Far beyond the road
You chose for you
A path to what you want
A path to what you need
Deserting those who bleed
What can I say?
Its just another test for me
To be the best that I can be
*
Its a better me for you
Consummation due
From a different view
All you see is new
It can’t be true?
Till my life is through
Live & die for you
I thought I knew
Now its up to you
*
The river rises now
Full of corpses, how?
Could we tolerate?
The hurt & the pain
This is genocide
Has the world gone blind?
As not to see
The rockets & the F-16’s
Apaches only in your dream
Yes its war again
Against every Muslim
In life you’re only free to sin
Pray in defeat again
Surrender to your fate & then
When comes your day?
Not far away
You’d be stupid not to see
All the signs pointing to thee
*
Its a better me for you
Consummation due
From a different view
All you see is new
It can’t be true?
Till my life is through
Live & die for you
I thought I said
Resurrection straight ahead
Cause the road left behind
Is the one that saves mankind
brilliant piece.
thanks 🙂
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thought I said
Resurrection straight ahead
Cause the road left behind
Is the one that saves mankind…
love the ending..
Thanks for sharing!
Happy Sunday!
Well done work. Interesting contribution to Rally … and no, Utopia is not real …
On a related subject, my poem for Rally –
http://musingbymoonlight.com/2010/09/08/baruch-the-baker/
I’ll be back to visit and read more …
Thanks for reading it 🙂
Hope you enjoyed it:)
I have my own take on Utopia but thats a poem for another time 😉
I loved the ending especially, it’s a brilliant poem.
I can feel the emotional depth in it.
My Poets Rally Poem, if you are interested: http://robinelizabeth58.wordpress.com/2010/08/05/falling-august-5-2010/
Thanks for reading it:)
Your words are really encouraging 🙂
Criticism is always welcomed if you have any 🙂
a better me for you. i liked that line =] kinda inspiring
Thanks Kyoichi 🙂
I’d like to think that I inspire myself & may be one day others will be inspired 🙂
good one…. enjoyed the ride….
thanks and cheers!!!
Glad you enjoyed it wisersky 🙂
Happy Wednesday!
Thanks for attending Poets Rally week 28.
Let me know if you are done visiting 18 poets,
when you visit, include your link of the entry, cheers.
I didn’t know I should include my link for the entry in all the poems I visit :S
I already visited some didn’t keep count & I didn’t leave my link
Hi Jingle
I read more than 18 on counting so I’m done
Some I commented without leaving my link
Thanks
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Sorry, i find it’s a bit hard for me to grasp the idea behind this. It’s kinda confusing for me. (Hope you don;t mind, just tell explain abit in what context is it) But i like how you play with the words. Very well written 🙂
Its an invitation to become better I become better person for you & may be you’ll become a better person for someone else. Among other things ;).
awesome stuff!!! also thanks for visiting.. 🙂
Thank you for visiting 🙂
Glad u liked it 🙂
poignant. 🙂
🙂
thanks for reading it
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Sunday, 8pm to Tuesday, 8pm, you have 48 hours to link in 1 to 3 poems…
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Hello, friend:
Monday Poetry Potluck Is NOW open, linking is open from Sunday 8pm to Tuesday, 8pm, welcome join us by linking in 1 to 3 poems, you could use an old poem, the more you share, the happier we are…hurry up!
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great pull the poem has a resonating magnetism that delivers you from beginning to end, keep writting